Assignment Instructions
Now that you’ve read about some revision techniques for your writing, it’s time to put those concepts to use!
For this worksheet, you’ll select 3 sentences from your Week 6 Persuasive Essay to edit using the techniques you’ve learned (specifically those located in
part 3 of the reading, “Sentence-Level Revision.”)
Provide each original sentence, and then the revised version you’ve come up with. Then, in 1-2 paragraphs, discuss which technique(s) you used to revise
your sentences, and why you think the new versions are superior.
Include your sentences and analysis in a document and submit it via this page to complete the assignment.
Your document should:
Be 12 pt, Times New Roman font, 1-inch margins, double spaced.
Include the original sentences from your week 6 paper, as well as the new revised versions and your 1-2 paragraphs discussing the changes you made.
1. The first argument that may be used to refute the concept and prejudice that “nursing is considered to be only a woman’s job” is that hypertension is the
most common health problem in the United States, with nearly half of the adult population, or nearly 117 million people, suffering from hypertension or high
blood pressure, which can lead to stroke or heart attack.
2. As a result, it is clear that all of these activities may be undertaken by both male and female nurses, dispelling thestereotype or misconception that nurses
must only be female.
3. Furthermore, the media plays a significant rolein depicting the profession of “Nursing” as a woman’s vocation, since current televisions and numerous
films sometimes label male nurses as “gay” for exhibiting feminine features despite being male. However, this is inaccurate, as this is a kind of discrimination